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Old 12-26-06, 03:56 AM   #1
 
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I'm not the best writter but I like my short stories. i cant seem to write anything longer or with an actual plot. These are from my life experiences. I view things differently...


I lacerated my heart out and tossed it to the side. I don't want to feel anymore. I wandered on around the neighborhood in the still dead calm of night. Four am is such a quiet time. My nocturnal friend spots me. Noticing I'm bare foot and half dressed "whats wrong Ash?" he has that scared bunny look in his eyes again. I cant stand lieing again "I want to die." I let him hold me as I cry noiselessly into his soft shoulder. My arm makes little tick tick noises as the red spatters on the cement below.

Sin slips off the tips of my fingers. The floor tilts up a little. I loose balance and my head hits the wall. "hmmu" The floors on the wall and gravity is playing favorites again. Mr.Bones is giggling is dry giggle at me. "Oh shut up!...." I half attempt to swing at him. I dose off. My red bought dreams.

"Oh wow look at that" Mr.Bones cackles as you lay on your back glaring up at him holding your arm. A bit of red hits your eye. A paroxysm of pain hits you hard as he squeases his grip. "Sting baby?" Your twisting in pain under him. "Then you shouldn't have done it."

I hold her tight. I watch her virgin wrists intertwined with my tainted wrists. The purple and pink bisecting lines coupled with her smooth pale skin. "What?" "Nothing" I kiss her gently.

I'm chasing cars in the cool night air. I feel like howling. Screaming. Im a volcano. I'm a hurricane. Ahhhh. But I wont scream I stay quiet. I stop in the middle of the road and gaze at the sky. corporate smog hides my sky. The sky is a wall but its nice to know its their sometimes. Mr.Bones sneaks up behind me and embraces me hard. "Found you!" Car horn blares. I run off bruised but not broken.
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Old 12-26-06, 05:49 PM   #2
 
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very descriptive and good. you have a good way of drawing the reader into the scene. i'm sorry that you've had these experiences, though. if anything, they provide a good writing venue for you. thanks for sharing with us.
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