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Old 07-20-15, 04:30 PM   #1
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Hi all only just joined and thought I'd share my poem feeling quite low tonight so it refects that a bit.

Life of pain

Life's such a struggle
It's so much pain
Never a good thought
Or a smile to gain
Just sad and lonely
A feeling of shame
That these thoughts in my mind
Will just stay the same
From the inside out
I just want to shout
I just want to let my personality out
But the dought and the shame
Just keep me the same
Same old me and this life of pain
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Old 07-20-15, 05:33 PM   #2
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hey i loved your poem,
reading from home,
dont know what to say,
but hope u find a way,
life's a bitch,
but i really wish,
that one day things will get better for you,
the rest is all poo.

lolllll. the last line didnt rhyme. i liked ur poem tho! meaningful and rhymes too :) keep it up!
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Old 07-20-15, 05:57 PM   #3
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Thanks bubblebear glad you liked it. Your was good to
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Old 07-22-15, 05:07 PM   #4
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Old 07-22-15, 05:48 PM   #5
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its cos ur not meant to critique or stuff. also maybe theyre all writing their masterpieces too :D
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